User:Chalynfaye/Sins Invalid/Kyrafisherl Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Chalynfaye


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chalynfaye/Sins_Invalid?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sins Invalid

Evaluate the drafted changes
From Kyra: For your vision section, I would be careful with statements that could be perceived as biased. While I agree with everything you're saying, I believe that some people would argue that this can't be stated as fact. I think that an easy fix to this would be saying that Sins Invalid explains that disabled people are present in an ableist society. I also really like what you added to this section including that Sins Invalid challenges what is considered "normal" and "sexy" because that was definitely something the wikipedia page needed to include more of since that is a huge part of Sins Invalid's vision. I also think that you could add details of the other projects that Sins Invalid is working on. I think you did a great job of covering Sins Invalid's vision and what they are focused on. I think overall that the sections you added were concise while still providing essential details and were organized into the correct sections of the wikipedia page.