User:ChanThaMan/Audience reception/Yahtzee3 Peer Review

General info
ChanThaMan
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:ChanThaMan/Audience reception
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Audience reception

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey ChanThaMan, you added a solid piece of information to this site, and although I am not a teacher, I do, however, see some minor grammatical and wordy errors. Your second sentence might start better if you said, "As a whole", rather than, "On the whole". Another correction you might want to make is by using another word rather than "tended" twice in that same sentence. The last sentence you wrote does not seem to make sense to me. It might flow a little bit better if you were to start the sentence off with something different than "Can". Overall, great piece of work, and I am glad I got to peer review your article.