User:Chanda10/Trauma and first responders/DkendraS Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Chanda10


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Chanda10/Trauma and first responders


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Trauma and first responders

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Chanda! I thoroughly enjoyed reading through your contributions to the trauma and first responders article. I think most of your additions are well-placed and thoughtful, and your sources seem to be accurate. The main edit I would make is to the analogy about trauma responders and rocks - I'm not entirely sure that it fits the academic tone of the article, and I'm also not sure that it contributes much to the empirical understanding of trauma responders. Maybe there's another way to incorporate the same ideas without using the analogy? But overall your contributions seem very sound and well thought out. DkendraS (talk) 22:41, 28 February 2021 (UTC) Kendra

''' Kendra, I will look over that. One common review I have recieved has been about that analogy. I will make some adjustments with the verbage becasue It might seem as if I am emotionally invested (which I am) however, some other peers made a point as well to reword to avoid sounding Bias. I totally understand what you're saying. Thank you! Chanda '''