User:Charleston Baker/Sexual victimization of Native American women/Carwil comments

Hi, I recognize you're at an early stage in adding to this article, so I'm going to lay out suggestions rather than offer my own peer review. Above all, don't be afraid to modify and rewrite already existing pieces of this article as you develop it.
 * The addition you made around the NIJR source is valuable and clearly summarized. To understand the statistics however, we need to know how they compare to the larger population's experience of sexual violence.
 * The article as you encountered it is very much within a criminal justice framework, meaning that it focuses pretty narrowly on the technical commission of a crime. Hence a lot of the article is taken up by definitions and statistics and very little on what situations and factors contribute to victimization.
 * In the definitions section, we hear about two legal definitions (somewhat repetititively). Eliminate the redundancy and reconsider whether we need a detailed description of which body parts legally qualify. The current definitions take up space that could be used to explain how sexual violence is often combined with other criminal activity, notably kidnapping and murder (especially when the perpetrator is a stranger) and domestic and intimate partner violence (in other cases).
 * For a broad overview of violence against Native American women, consider this issue of the journal Social Justice: https://www.jstor.org/stable/i29768267
 * These sources also look helpful:
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 * https://www.ncjrs.gov/pdffiles1/nij/grants/223691.pdf
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 * https://www.ncjrs.gov/pdffiles1/nij/grants/223691.pdf

Let me know if I can be of help in any way.--Carwil (talk) 20:31, 3 November 2020 (UTC)