User:CharlieFarrell74/Misogyny in sports/Daalexandram Peer Review

General info
Charlie, Fiona, Alex, Amine
 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:CharlieFarrell74/Misogyny in sports
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Misogyny in sports

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? The article does a good job of staying on one track. The examples are all closely related and flow together. Everything is to the point and expresses the ideas you are trying to put out there. You guys did so well at finding good sources and incorporating them into the page. I found your information interesting and very specific. It is all adding to the themes of the Misogyny in Sports article and I think it will fit in perfectly with the other sections, the Title IX section. The article you created fully expresses the importance of the issue and shows the scary realities of it. Bias also isn't evident and you guys had so many facts that could have made showing bias so easy. There is no appearance of you guys trying to persuade the readers to think a certain way which is really good given the topic and how easy it could be to express opinions. I think you guys did a good job at organizing the order of your information and the length of each paragraph was good relative to the specific topic.
 * 2) What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? I would suggest maybe some more expansion on the topics and examples you do have. I think the article is really good in the sense of bringing in important evidence but maybe more detail on the ones you have now.  I think a recent example like you mentioned would be good to show this is an ongoing issue now. I would also suggest sometimes paraphrasing the long quotes, like the one that is bolded. Some of the quotes are really good but extensive and frequent.
 * 3) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? The most important thing is the long quotes happening one after the other.
 * 4) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! The thing that I definitely need to work on after seeing this article would be my reliance on my sources. I tried to get a lot of information from my own analysis of the movie but I should definitely look for more quotes. I think the sources were great and relevant and I realize I need to find better sources that actually relate directly to what I am trying to write about.