User:Charlottespohler/Reyhan Jamalova/Jiyoonh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Team 3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Charlottespohler/Reyhan_Jamalova
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead is concise and provides brief information about the other subsections of the article.

When you talk about how Jamalova made it onto various lists like Forbes, I think it may too specific to be stated in the lead as you state these achievements as part of a subsection later. I think in the lead, I would keep her achievements a bit more vague as to not get too specific and repeat yourself later on the article.

Overall, this lead is very strong and concisely sums up the article well.

Content

The content in this article is relevant to the topic, up to date, and does deal with women in STEM, a topic that is historically underrepresented.

Tone and Balance

The tone and sources presented in the article are neutral and do not try to persuade the reader of any position.

Sources and References

The sources you used are great! I think you guys have a great variety of credited sources that you are using right now in the article. One line struck out to me -- "At the age of 14, Jamalova founded the Rainergy project." Is there a source backing this up? It was not cited in the draft, maybe double-check on that.

Organization

The content added is well-written, with no grammatical or spelling errors. The organization of the content is broken into clear sections with relevant information included in each subsection.

Images and Media

There are no images included in the article, but it could be helpful to have a visual of Jamalova throughout the article to show different contexts.

For New Articles

I believe that this article does in fact meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements -- there are more than 3 sources supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject. The list of resources gathered is impressive, but I believe that this article may benefit from including a section that describes in more detail about the upbringing of Jamalova, for she seems to have been impacted heavily by her childhood and her circumstances. Perhaps a personal interview conducted about her (I saw several online) could be another source to include.

Overall Impressions

Overall, great job with your article! Sources seem great, and what you've written so far is nicely supported and easy to digest. I believe a few improvements, like including a picture of Jamalova, or the moving parts in the Rainergy project would be great supplements to what you've written. Also, more background information may be beneficial for reasons stated beforehand.