User:Charlottespohler/Reyhan Jamalova/Katieshanley13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Charlottespohler, User:Emand2026, User:Guamyo, User:Polovinnak


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Charlottespohler/Reyhan_Jamalova (Links to an external site.)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) The lead does a good job of introducing the topic while keeping it concise. It doesn't appear to introduce anything that is not explained in the following article which is good.
 * 2) The content added is relevant to the topic. I would consider adding basic information such as Birthdate, age, etc... in the history section of the article.
 * 3) Some questions to consider answering:
 * 4) Why didn't she have access to STEM?
 * 5) Why was she expected to marry at the age of 17?
 * 6) What sparked her fundraising campaign? Was it a specific event? a specific person?
 * 7) Consider changing the tone a little bit. It reads as a story rather than stating facts or information.
 * 8) "and a lack of care from local authorities for this rural community" this sentence doesn't seem neutral. Consider rewording it to take a neutral stance
 * 9) Sources look good. They are reliable and up to date. They are also plentiful which is important for a new article.
 * 10) The article is structured nicely and easy to read. The only thing I would consider (as I said before) is to consider changing the tone so that it doesn't read as a story.

** it is important to add as much detail as possible as your audience may be completely unfamiliar with the topic or the culture surround the topic. It important not to assume that your audience is knowledgeable about the topic *