User:Charlottespohler/Reyhan Jamalova/Willmoore2024 Peer Review

Lead:

-Your lead does a good job of making it clear that she is famous for being a founder and inventor.

-I would combine the first sentence with the third sentence to make for a stronger lead because rainergy is her big invention. If you just say founder and inventor it makes me say "Thats cool! inventor of what thouugh? Oohhhh there it is in the third sentence"

Content:

-This is good Content and you guys had a lot of good stuff on the history section but I would have elaborated on her admittance to Penn St.

-The rainenergy part is very well written due to the fact that you made sure to include her name in there a lot to keep it on topic about her and not solely about her invention.

Tone and Balance:

-Good job here nothing stood out as too bias

Organization:

Pretty well organized the order of the sections followed the order you mentioned them in the lead.

Images and Media:

-Jee I wonder what she looks like?

For new articles only

-You guys pulled from a bunch of good sources good job here

Overall Impression:

Lead needs fixing but other than that it is really good and a really cool topic. Nice job!

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