User:Charris0524/Erotic talk/Kaybraidi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Charris0524


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Charris0524/Erotic_talk?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Erotic talk

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Considering that the original article lacks a lot of information, and resources, this is a great start. I do like that you identified the 8 themes of erotic part. I believe focusing on these 8 themes will be a great way to expand upon the topic.

My only concern is that the revisions are heavily reliant on a single source/study, and thereby feel almost like a summary of the research rather than topic centered. The second statement in the original introduction did not seem to have any sources attached although sounding like fact. I’d recommend either finding a source to help support it, or removing it completely.