User:Chase.ingersoll23/Concerns and controversies at the 2020 Summer Olympics/Jaycelyons Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Chase.Ingersoll23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chase.ingersoll23/Concerns_and_controversies_at_the_2020_Summer_Olympics?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Concerns and controversies at the 2020 Summer Olympics

Evaluate the drafted changes
The introduction, or lead into the article seems like a good way to draw people in and makes the reader know exactly what the article is going to be about. One downfall I noticed while viewing this article was that it has SO many different sections that it seems to almost be too much. Some of these sections can be put together or have more added to them rather than having the heading bolded with one sentence underneath it. I do agree that adding some more sources in order to broaden the the understanding and bias of the article will make it overall much more strong and relevant to more people rather than focused, or biased on just a small group. There is a huge number of references at the end of this article but I am curious as to if each of them are really being used? With almost 300 references, it seems like the article would have so much information in it that it couldn't be wrong or biased in a sense.