User:ChaseTerry548440/Rapids/Marythemuffinlady Peer Review

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ChaseTerry548440


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 * User:ChaseTerry548440/Rapids


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 * Rapids

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead sentence is clearly states the topic of the draft, rapid biodiversity.

Content:

- "Similarly in the Araguaia River in Brazil, there was an abundance of species from the order Characiformes and cichlids from the order Cichliformes.": I would suggest the addition of a sentence here to summarize what the two previous examples describe about biodiversity. Do these particular species express an aspect of biodiversity, other than just species richness? If not, may want to simply state it shows that rapids have a high biodiversity of fish, etc.

- "In the Peixe River in Brazil, common species that were present are Leporinus obtusidens, Bryconamericus iheringii, and Bryconamericus stramineus, which as all part of the Characiformes order.": Again, I would suggest the addition of a sentence here to summarize what the previous examples say about the biodiversity. Does this disagree with previous examples & exhibit a lower biodiversity? Does it agree with previous examples of high biodiversity? Do these species infer something specific about the biodiversity of those particular rapids? Etc.

- "Another new species Hyphessobrycon rheophilus from the order Characiformes has also been discovered.": I would suggest an addition here to elaborate on what a new species says about the biodiversity.

- "Species present in the Luongo river were Barbus puellus from the order Barbus, Kneria paucisquamata from the order Kneria, and two species from the order Siluriformes - Amphilius platychir and Clarias submarginatus.": I would suggest an addition of a sentence here to elaborate on the previous examples and how the species data relates to biodiversity. Does this show a difference in biodiversity due to tropical region of examples? Is it concurrent with previous statements made on rapid biodiversity? Etc.

- "Common orders found in river rapids tends to point out to species from the order Characiformes and Siluriformes. Species from Characiformes that are present in river rapids seem to be characterized by smaller heads and mouth regions and wide fusiform bodies which would be advantageous for fish species swimming in rapids.": I would suggest an addition to explain more about the common orders. What about Siluriformes morphology? What do these common orders say about the biodiversity of the rapids? Are these large orders, etc.?

- "Many of these species are dependent on the rapids for an assortment of things such as nutrient gathering and spawning. Similarly in Europe, Dnieper River, we can see macroinvertebrates from the orders Amphipoda, Mysida, and Veneroida.": I would suggest an additional sentence here to explain the importance to biodiversity. What do macroinvertebrates say about the biodiversity? Do these particular species highlight something specific about the biodiversity? Etc.

Tone/Balance: The tone of the drafts seems to be neutral.

Sources/References: The sources are up to date and well used throughout the article draft.

- Need to add sources into bibliography.

Organization:

- "Species are abundant in many of these rapids such as the Xingu River in Brazil.": I would suggest to edit sentence so it is clear you are talking about fish species & not all fish species, so may want to try "Some species of fish..." etc.

- "...Tometes kranponhah being present.": The "being present" seems unnecessary here, I would suggest an edit.

- "Although Bullheads (Cottus gobio) is mainly associated with the rapids, other species such as brown trout (Salmo trutta), chubs (Leuciscus cephalus), and stone loaches (Barbatula barbatula).": I would suggest to add in "are present/were identified in rapids" at the end of sentence; this is because it would be "other species...are present" which is more clear.

- "Species from Characiformes that are present in river rapids seem to be characterized by smaller heads and mouth regions and wide fusiform bodies which would be advantageous for fish species swimming in rapids.": Need to edit sentence for flow; may change to "smaller heads and mouth regions as well as/along with wide fusiform bodies"