User:ChaseTerry548440/Rapids/Tommyj0127 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(ChaseTerry548440)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:ChaseTerry548440/Rapids


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:ChaseTerry548440/Rapids

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi ChaseTerry548440,

I  found your paper a little confusing to follow in the first paragraph section of your Wikipedia sandbox.

The first recommendation that I have for your paper starts with the first sentence in the first paragraph. If you move the first sentence in paragraph one down to the next paragraph it may flow better and make more sense. A part I found confusing was listing all the rivers and species in your first paragraph without stating why they are important to rapids biodiversity. Adding something that helps a reader to make that connection will really bring home why that information is important to the first paragraph.

One idea that may help a first-time reader to better understand some of the scientific paper information you added, is if you used more common names of aquatic species. When reading the scientific names it's hard to see what animals are being discussed when someone doesn’t come from a scientific background. By adding the common names I think it could help the reader to better understand the great information you are using in your paper.

With the below sentence it needs to have a little more information added in order for it to be a complete idea. I know that when I write I sometimes leave a sentence without finishing the idea. I just wanted to point this out so you could finish your thought.

Although Bullheads (Cottus gobio) is mainly associated with the rapids, other species such as brown trout (Salmo trutta), chubs (Leuciscus cephalus), and stone loaches (Barbatula barbatula).

The only other thing that needs some work is the citations down at the bottom of your sandbox. Only 2 of the citation links work when you click on them. For the guidelines it said to make sure they worked when someone clicked on them. When I tried all of yours, I could on get the two of twelve to work. This would be something quick and easy to get done.