User:Cheerios1028/Screaming jelly babies/Erdabravest2001 Peer Review

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Cheerios1028
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 * User:Cheerios1028/Screaming jelly babies
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Your article on the "Screaming Jelly Babies" experiment is informative and well-structured. The introduction effectively sets the context and explains the significance of the demonstration in an educational setting. The body of the article is clear and concise, providing a good balance between scientific detail and accessibility for a general audience. The mechanism section is particularly well-done, breaking down the chemical reactions in a step-by-step format that is easy to follow.

A few suggestions for improvement:


 * Ensure accuracy in the reference section. The  template seems to have a formatting issue with the date in the first reference.
 * Consider adding a safety note or disclaimer, highlighting the need for proper supervision and safety equipment when conducting this experiment, as it involves an open flame and potentially hazardous chemicals.

Overall, it's a well-composed article that successfully communicates the educational and engaging aspects of this popular chemistry demonstration.

The esperanto version of this was a nice touch.