User:Cheerios1028/Screaming jelly babies/Groggler Peer Review

General info
Cheerios1028 and CrayfishClarinetist
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Cheerios1028/Screaming jelly babies
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Screaming jelly babies

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead is succinct and good overall. "Practised" should be "practiced", and I think "secondary school science" could be shortened to just "science" with "open evenings" changed to "secondary school open evenings". I think there should be a comma (maybe) after "Potassium chloride, a strong oxidising agent" Good body overall. I would use consistent wording for the second reaction "The X decomposes into Y and Z". A net reaction might be useful. Esperanto section is awesome, understood every word :-p.