User:Cheerios1028/Screaming jelly babies/Paoof Peer Review

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Cheerios1028
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 * User:Cheerios1028/Screaming jelly babies
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Screaming jelly babies
 * Screaming jelly babies

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like how concise and clear the lead is. I was confused by the title, but the first line of the page clarifies it really well. I appreciate how the article body ties in the chemistry with the experiment rather than focusing too much on the theatrics and usage of it. The step by step mechanism is well done, but might benefit from a visual aid as support. This would draw the eye to the mechanism and make it even more captivating for the readers.

The structure was clear, but more could be included in the article body to increase the coverage and scope of how the experiment was first discovered and brought into the classroom. I found myself curious about how it came to be, so it might be worth including briefly. The sources are reliable and relevant, but a bit outdated. I would suggest looking into the current usage of the experiment or other details