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Immersive Technology
Immersive Technology

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I chose this article because immersive technology is a relatively new form of technology that seems like it'd be interesting to learn more about. Immersive technology is probably the most advanced form of gaming that allows people to experience a virtual world through sight and sound. My preliminary impression of the article is that it seems to lack detail under some of the subheadings. More specifically, I think there could be more to add in the research/development and application sections. There are also a few spelling/grammatical errors that I noticed. The overall layout/design is done well, but overall it needs more attention to detail.

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The lead has a topic sentence that describes what immersive technology is but it does not highlight the major sections in the article. It's a little too concise. There could be a more detail to give the reader a little better of an understanding of what immersive technology is all about. The content in the article is relevant to the topic, but I don't feel that it is up to date. It could include much more about what is going today in immersive technology. Such as new developments, news, and especially videogames. There needs to be more information on the origin and on research/development. They really only mention universities that are working on the advancement of immersive technology. Information should be added to each subheading, as they really only skim the surface of each. The tone/balance of the article remains consistent/unbiased and does not try to persuade the reader one way or another. Although, they seem to leave out a lot of relevant information related to immersive technology. They also have a lot of run on sentences and clear grammatical errors that can make it difficult to read fluently. The article is backed up by a variety of 15 different sources, although only 4 of them have authors listed. This can be a red flag, as that damages the credibility of the sources used. The sources are all relatively current and easily accessible, but could absolutely use some more recent sources in regards to videogames. I also feel as though there are plenty of other sources that would provide key information to the advancement of this article. As I said, the writing has quite a few clear grammatical errors and run-ons. Its broken down into sections that are relevant to immersive technology, but each section lacks some detail that would greatly enhance the quality of this article. There are some parts that are also unclear that could possibly leave the reader confused. There are 2 images of men who are using virtual reality headsets. These do a decent job of showing what it looks like to use the immersive technology head sets, but there are a ton of stronger images they could have used to help the reader better understand what immersive technology is all about. Not just two random men wearing head sets. Each image has a basic caption explaining what it is, although they do not use the names of the men in the photos. They are also placed right next to each other. It would be more visually appealing if there were more, spaced out images. The talk page had no conversations or ratings. Overall, this article clearly needs a lot of work. It lacks in detail in nearly every section, has grammatical errors throughout, needs more stronger images, etc. It has strong sub headings but each one needs to be looked at more in depth. There should also be a subheading for gaming. I would say this article is definitely underdeveloped and simply needs work in all aspects.