User:Chemlearn11/Flame retardant/Greengiraffe123 Peer Review

I think that there is just so much information in this article originally. I think it would be beneficial to condense it down in some parts and delete some information that isnt relevant or could be too much. For example, you should condense down the "exposure" sections. There are like 4 or 5 sections about different types of exposure to flame retardant. As the reader of this article it is just so long and so dense with information that it is hard to read. You should edit the lead section and maybe add what we will see in the rest of the article because the lead doesnt really provide any information about what will be in the article, it just talks about what flame retardant is and the types. But other than condensing it down a bit I think this article is good. There is no bias and the tone is very neutral. There are SO many sources too which is great!

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