User:Chemlearn11/Flame retardant/Mbrighton3 Peer Review

Overall there is a lot of great information throughout this entire article. It is very educational and not only teaches you about flame retardant but also gives examples and real life connections. I think there is a lot of mini sections that are broken down very specifically. Personally as reader, I think it would be good to see how the article can be broken into less tiny sections and into a larger section that isn't so close ended. This can allow for the reader to think and process more of what they are reading. The organization right now seems like they are just bullet points and I want to be able to connect them to have a deeper meaning. But I think the quality and quantity of the information is very good and educational.

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