User:Cherriesandashes/Relational Aspects Between North and South Africa/Nick Amato Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cherriesandashes


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cherriesandashes/Relational_Aspects_Between_North_and_South_Africa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Cherriesandashes, your article sandbox does very well in highlighting the relationship that Egypt has to Southern Africa. It is a great start to what the article will eventually look like at the end. Some minor suggestions would be to establish specific sections for the countries that you are going compare, contrast, and analysis. For example, naming one section Egypt, so that the reader knowns that this "Egypt" section is going to show how Egypt (North Africa) relates to the rest of South Africa. And then continue that pattern for Libya, Tunisia, Algeria, Morocco, etc. I would also focus on sentence structures. It was a little hard to follow, but it was great information and related exactly to what your topic is. With a little more clarity it will bring your article to the next level. Another helpful idea would be to incorporate some sort of pictures as well. I know that this is simply the beginning stages of your article, and that you have already planned to handle the items above anyways, but with a couple more sources and balanced sections for your article, I think this article will be excellent, and really help others that are in search of how the Northern and Southern African states engage with one another individually, as well as regionally.