User:CherylnVerlin/Vivian Qu/GreenBruchert8 Peer Review

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Vivian Quo Peer Review:

Lead: The introductory paragraph for Vivian Quo is concise and to the point. It highlights Quo’s greatest career achievements first, and later takes into account her smaller scale achievements. I like that the primary focus of this paragraph is her international success and awards. There is no inclusion of nitty gritty details until afterwards.

Content: I feel like some of the information provided in Quo’s Life and Career paragraph is not necessary, and takes away from the article's focus. While it is great to list Quo’s filmography in this paragraph, I don’t think it is necessary to go into the plot of her different film’s storyline. It feels a bit distracting to describe the plot of her films when the priority of the paragraph is to describe Quo’s Career and life.

Tone and Balance: I found the tone of this article to be very even. There was a sense of neutrality when reading it. The writer is intentional about sticking to the facts and does not overly applaud the director to a point of bias.

Sources and References: The sources used were all well known and reliable. They are clearly legitimate and supply accurate information. I would trust these sources to deliver me correct information on this director.

Organization: I think a lot of the information provided in this article is fantastic. However, the writer could have separated Quo’s personal life experiences from her career experiences. This would have led to the article obtaining more clarity. This way we could choose to strictly read about Quo’s career success, or if we wanted to read a bit more in depth, we could find the part that touches on her personal life instead.

Overall: I think the organization of the information is what threw me off. However, the information is great, informative, reliable, and well written. I think if there were separate sections for the information in this article it would help with its overall clarity.