User:CheyenneGreen/User:CheyenneGreen/sandbox/Demi12005 Peer Review

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(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Peer Review Lead:

I feel like something that the article did well was that it was interesting and kept me engaged the whole time.

Some things that i think you should change are, For the second paragraph I would talk about what they had done to get the children healthcare. did they make it mandatory. in the technology section how was it cost efficiency. in the services the second paragraph start add what service was better.

I think that the author should work on is adding more detail to what they have already written.

i feel like i could use a bit more detail in my own article.

Article Lead Section:

yes i feel although the article shows the importance of the topic that they are talking about. yes i feel like they do include the most important information in the lead and it is very detailed. i feel like the lead really talks bout the main part that the student wanted to get across. i could not find any missing information.

Structure:

Yes i feel as though the sections are very organized and things aren't repeated throughout the articles. i don't feel like there is any information you should take out i feel like you should only add some more details and be more clear about what you are saying. i feel like both viewpoint are very well represented. i don't feel like the article is bias at all. The article was was done very well. i was impressed with the length of the article. i would just add more description of what your talking about.

Neutral Content

No i don't think i could guess the perspective of the author. i feel although you have some sentences that need more description in some sentences. from what i saw the article does not leave out who they are talking about. Reliable sources

Yes her sources are very reliable and all within a good time frame. More are connected to the article. All of the sources are spaced out. In the article it is not just about on source they all have a fair amount of information in them.

Reviewer Reflection

Based on this article i plan to add more details to my article, make sure i am not repeating anything, and make sure i am not having a bias opinion.