User:CheyenneGreen/User:CheyenneGreen/sandbox/Sawyerbl Peer Review

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The article has great information on the advancement of healthcare in Cincinnati. What has impressed me in this article is how far Cincinnati has come in keeping up with medical advancements. I like how you highlighted the words that some people may not understand. It makes it easier to look up information as you go if needed. As far as changes go, I don't think anything needs to be changed. The information that you have here is straight to the point and covers everything very well.

The advancement in medical technology is very important, and I can see that in the article. Overall, the balance in the article is great. You hit every topic to explain what you wanted and have great information in it. I don't think anything is missing in this article.

The sections in the article were well-balanced and in order. I don't think anything needs to be changed. It is nonbiased and straight to the point with what you were trying to say in the article.

Overall great job on the article. I wouldn't change anything here. your resources are excellent and back up the information that you wrote.

I think I should make three revisions to my article after reading yours: to find more information on some of my topics if possible. My article seems like it is off balance after reading yours. Another thing is highlighting some of the words in my article so people can look up more information outside of just that shipwreck. I also think I need to organize my sources a little better. I have bits and pieces from each source that I put together, and it makes it seem like the article is a bit choppy.