User:Cheynehoke/Refugee health in the United States/Natalieychu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

user: Cheynehoke


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Refugee health in the United States sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Healthcare barriers


 * very strong lead statement that addresses the topic and content of the article.
 * the beginning may be more beneficial with a definition or a hyperlink to 'resettled refugee communities'
 * this section would be stronger with a citation: "As a result of the COVID-19 pandemic, a survey conducted in 2021 found that refugee communities primarily composed of African and Southeast Asian were suffering disproportionately from the effects of the pandemic. Specifically, 76% reported difficulty paying for food, housing and healthcare, 70% reported lost income, and 58% indicated concern about paying bills"

Structural barriers


 * great contribution that diversifies the existing article with more current statistics!

The Healthy Migrant Effect


 * super interesting and relevant content; well-sourced addition to the existing article
 * in the 2nd to last line of this article, instead of 'diminish,' perhaps a neutral verb like 'reduce' or 'decrease' to maintain that 'neutral' encyclopedia voice.
 * I may be wrong, but I would be cautious with the term "U.S. natives" in order not to confuse non-Indigenous American-born citizens from Indigenous communities (unless this is the term that was used in the existing article)

Financial barriers


 * great leading sentence that is credible, well-sourced, and concise.
 * good use of hyperlinks to over relevant articles that can support the overall flow
 * line 7 from the bottom of this section: "the paper suggests" sounds more essay-ish and can be shortened to "research implies that the Department of Health..."