User:Chicanaart2021/Jeaneen Carlino/Uclastudent2021 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Chicanaart2021's article on Jeaneen Carlino.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chicanaart2021/Jeaneen_Carlino?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Does not currently exist.

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The article does a good job at introducing the artist. I would suggest to include the artists birth year (ex. 2000 - present, like our template had) if it can be found. The lead introduces the the artists Art. There is not much information about the artists biography and the artists art technique is not found later in the article. Maybe the author can elaborate on the artists mediums and work in the Art or biography section. Overall, it is concise and detailed enough!

Content:

The information added to the wikipedia page is all very relevant to the artist. The information also appears to be up-to-date. The author can potentially add more information to the “Biography” section since it is the “shortest” section (if author can find more information). I think the author can add more detail to their art they included. Potentially information author will use to present in class. The author is contributing to Wiki’s equity gap by creating an article about a Chicanx Artist!Lastly, I think it’d be great to reference in more detail an art piece about feminism (if author can find more info). Overall, great and relevant content.

Tone and Balance:

The tone of the content is neutral. The author does not try to persuade the reader. Great tone and balance.

Sources and References:

First, the author adds more than three sources so there is variety! I’m not sure about the reliability/scholarly aspect of each source, but I think 2/6 might meet the criteria. I would try to find other sources to make sure the wiki page is published! The majority of the sources seemed up to date and current. The links work fine for all the sources cited! I would suggest to hyperlink or cite some of the websites so that the URL is not just next to the text!

Organization:

The content is well-written and concise. The information is clear and easy to digest. The content is broken down well, but I would suggest to change the format in the Art section to make it more visually appealing. One suggestion is to remove the url text and either hyperlink or cite it! Overall, great organization.

Images & Media:

No images or media currently included.

For New Articles Only:

The article does a good job at following the structure of other articles. I would suggest that the author continue to look for more sources because I am not sure if the article currently meets the Notability requirement.

Overall:

I think the article is a good start to introducing the artist. The information is all relevant to the artists and speaks to who she is as a visual artist. The major area of improvement would be to try to find more sources/information and reformat the Art section to not be filled with the URL text. Great job!