User:Chikiaart/Black feminism/Jmacmac Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Chikiaart


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Chikiaart/Black feminism
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Black feminism

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the section you are adding to the black feminism page is very interesting. I like that while the section is seemingly focused in large part on hook's ideas on the subject, you also included Janet Mock's counterpoint. It is important to allow for many voices as the black feminist community, as with any other community is not a monolith and is made up of many different but often equally valid points of view. I was interested in where you plan on inserting the section. Perhaps as an addition to the lead section or are you going to make it it's own section. The way you have formated the draft makes me wonder if you are creating one section or if the two sentences in the middle that stand on their own are going somewhere else.

While you speak to the critique of the ways in which Beyonce is represented, it may be interesting to include examples of other black female artists and entertainers and how they are represented within the framework of this critique.

Obviously as I am sure you are aware, citation are needed and I can see that you have compiled a list of sources in the bibliography section. I have found it easier to add the citations in as I write, so that I do not forget where they came from.

There is a already a page on wikipedia on the topic of intersectionality, as such you might consider removing the definition of intersctionality and simply linking the word to the existing page.

Good luck completing your section and I look forward to reading the final result.