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Article Evaluation
Hip-hop Feminism- the page is part of two Wikiprojects, one that covers hip-hop and the other covering feminism. In the talk page there is not much back and forth conversation but there are suggestions for how the article could be improved in the sections that it already has.

Surfing Page Fixes
The current Wikipedia page on surf culture is a good resource in some ways, but falls short in others. The page provides background information such as where surfing originated, and how it was revamped during the 1950’s. It also mentions the other trends and boardsports that branch off from surfing culture, like the woodie and skateboarding. There is a focus here on the culture that surrounds those who surf. The local communities that surfing creates are an important aspect of the subculture that has been focused on the page already. Parts of the culture that have there own subsections include the art and fashion that has evolved through the popularity of the activity in coastal areas.

There is also a section on the page that refers to the terminology that was related to surfing, which showcases how it as a subculture has its own coded words. One important part of the Wikipedia page is the part that discusses the environmentalism of surfers. The location of surfing is a huge part of the culture because it can only occur in very specific areas. Overall the Wikipedia page offers some good background information on surf culture but it can be expanded upon to make it a better resource for understanding the subculture.

Possibly add a section on how surfing inspired skate boarding.

Women in Surfing
Like men, women started surfing in ancient Polynesia. This was especially documented in the waters around Hawaii. Until the 1830s these women were actively engaged in surfing. This changed when American missionaries came to the islands and told them that it was not proper for women to be surfing. Women did not begin surfing around the Hawaiian islands again until the late 1800s. By the end of World War II surfing would have a major revival that increased its popularity and participating membership. Women were encouraged to take up surfing by two of the early board designers, in part because these men believed that surfing would help women to keep their feminine figure.

There would be another rise in the popularity of women's surfing just a decade later as they were increasingly a part of surfing films. One example of this are the Gidget movie trilogy and TV series based on the book by the same title. In spite of this it was still believed that women should be the viewers rather than the participants of surfing.

Due to the negative reactions women received because of their involvement in surfing, being labeled as 'masculine' or 'tomboys', women began to take ownership of their participation. This is seen in their working together to organize surfing competitions for women. There had been competitions for women held in the 50s and 60s but these were amateur events. The 70s and 80s saw a shift in this as women entered into the world of professional surf competitions. This caused a change in the style with which women surfed at the time by focusing more on their power and speed as athletes rather than being aesthetically pleasing to the viewer. Today, professional female surfers continue to have a difficult time being recognized as athletes, and must deal with the continued objectification and sexual gazes from spectators.

Professional female surfers have also noted that they face pay inequality when compared to their male counterparts. Women do not win the same amount in prize money as men do. These women have also indicated that the issue of pay equality arises when it comes to corporate sponsorships by surf brands. There is a prioritization here for the brands to hire surfers who appear more conventionally attractive but not be the most talented of surfers.

Bikini
The bikini is an iconic piece of swim clothing. It was popularized in Europe initially but then was popularized in the United States after it was seen being worn by famous Hollywood stars. Based on this popularity films used the bikini to market their movies. The bikini created a connection between sexuality and the exoticism that was seen in the people and culture of the Pacific Islands. For many years women did not have the option to not wear the bikini as there were not other pieces of surf wear being tailored to their need. This changed as the style of surf clothes was adopted by those who were not part of the culture. Companies began to create board shorts specifically for women's bodies, thus giving them an option besides the bikini to wear while surfing in competitions. This is beneficial for both the female surfers and the brands as it gives women more clothing options and creates more revenue for the companies.

Information Needed

 * create a section on women's participation in surfing
 * possibly start with the history of women in the subculture
 * important to talk about women in competitive surfing
 * possibly add to the section on fashion

PEER EVAL. BY MATT PELOSI 4/26/18
Like men, women started surfing in ancient Polynesia, known now as the waters surrounding Hawaii. These surfers engaged in the activity into the 1830s, however this changed when American missionaries came to the islands and proclaimed the endeavor to be ill-fit for women. Following, women had not resumed surfing around the Hawaiian islands again until the late 1800s. By the end of World War II, surfing would have a revival that increased its popularity and participating membership. Women were encouraged to take up surfing by two of the early board designers, in part because these men believed that surfing would help women to keep their feminine figure.

Due to the negative reactions women received because of their involvement, being labeled as 'masculine' or 'tomboys', they began to take ownership of their participation. This is seen in their working together to organize surfing competitions for women. There had been previous competitions for women held in the 50s and 60s, but these were amateur events. The 70s and 80s saw a shift in this as women entered into the world of professional surf competitions. This caused a change in the style with which women surfed at the time by focusing more on their power and speed as athletes rather than being aesthetically pleasing to the viewer. Today, professional female surfers continue to have a difficult time being recognized as athletes, and must deal with the continued objectification and sexual gazes from spectators.

Above are a few syntax/grammatical changes I thought of, but overall your research seems to be super well-rounded and your contribution appears very thorough. I am curious about the ABC News articles as a source, if it is reliable etc. But I know it is hard to find 'academic' sources all the time but overall it looks great to me :-) Roger.chat (talk) 03:22, 27 April 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for this. I will make sure to fix the grammar and syntax issues that you pointed out.