User:Chitimes2/An Jung-sik/Td1935 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Chitimes2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chitimes2/An_Jung-sik?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * An Jung-sik
 * An Jung-sik

Evaluate the drafted changes
General:

Edit: In 'Early Life', section 'The Royal Bureau of Painting' regarding Jang Seung-eop, his name is not consistent between Chang and Jang.

Suggestion: using Jung-sik when referring to him vs using An?

Lead (Suggestion): change the last sentence to be more clear while also giving more emphasis to his career as a teacher which I feel is a big part of him.

Content (Suggestion): Write a bit more about his birth and childhood if able to find sources, before explicitly writing about Jang Seung-eop.

Tone and Organization is well done.

References are relevant, try also Treasures from Korea Arts and Cultures of the Joseon Dynasty, 1392 - 1910, edited by Hyunsoo Woo available at the library.

Images: would recommend including images of the paintings later before publishing, if accessible.

Really enjoyed reading, and all the content added is impressive! Excited to read the final product :)

Bibliography: needs to be edited to portray your sources