User:Chloe dela Cruz12345678910!/Sunset Scene/ArtHistorianStudent Peer Review

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I really enjoyed reading your draft. I especially liked how your outlined your sections with the different titles beginning with "Sunset Scene" and concluding with "Social and economic stating of who owns the piece" as I think that having these sections will not only help in your reading following along in your article, but also help in guiding your own research. When reading the lead I found it really helpful how you included hyperlinks to the images from your artwork to the cemetery. When looking to revise, I do think that the ending of the lead paragraph is a bit abrupt, and a transition sentence or concluding sentence might be a nice addition to lead into the next section.

When reading through your "Tiffany Studios and Louis Comfort Tiffany" section, I did find it very interesting to read about the background history of stain glass. Although, I do think that when revising it may be helpful to paste the article into a Word Document and look through the grammar (capitulation and punctuation) - because there are areas that are missing capital letters and commas. Additionally, when inputting references, it is great that you included them but there is also a method to hyperlink the references with a number at the conclusion of each sentence - that is really helpful. This is an amazing start, and I am so excited to see what your revised article looks like!