User:Chodges8/Apathy/Khiggin1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(chodges8)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Chodges8/Apathy
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Apathy

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead lets us know that the bolded words are the edits made to the article, but so far it does not let us know what to expect from the article. The content that you have added so far helps to incorporate the several different aspects of apathy. I was wondering if you planned on adding individual sections to describe the physical repercussions of chronic apathy since you mentioned institutionalization and mortality? Overall, I think that the tone and content is neutral; you have done a good job of providing descriptions for short term and chronic mortality. Your writing is clear and concise, but the organization is a little difficult for me to follow. If the organization of topics was cleaned up or rearranged I believe that it would be easier to read. For further directions, I think all you need to do it add more references after you expand your draft and take a look at the organization.