User:Chrisaco1/Jeaneen Carlino/Jojobruin24 Peer Review

General info
Chrisaco1
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chrisaco1/Jeaneen_Carlino?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall this is a super solid draft for your article. One thing I noticed is that you will need to add a Lead section before the background section, and just have a few sentences to briefly describe what you go into detail on in the rest of the article. The content looks really thorough and balanced across sections, although I do think the tone could be a little more neutral. When it comes to using evidence I see that you have three sources which is good, but I am worried about using Jeaneen’s website as a source because I think you might have issues with that info being seen as biased and not reliable. Also, you’ll need to add in text citations to your article just to verify where each piece of info is coming from. But like I said to begin with, I think this is a really good start to the article, it will just need some fine tuning.