User:ChrispinPerez/Yosemite National Park/00BlueSky00 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ChrispinPerez


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * ChrispinPerez/Yosemite National Park, however they do not currently have a draft available so I will be going through the live article to distinguish possible places for update/change.


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Yosemite National Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
The live article needs a lot more information regarding the native tribes and the events that occurred pushing them out. The additions can include all the wrong information at the tourist areas as well, such as the extinction of the tribe and its people. I also think it should be expressed why the Native Americans are working for the national park and what that does for them. There are lot of areas regarding the Native Americans that can be added to the live article.

Just make sure to include the information in the lead and utilize reliable sources.