User:ChrispinPerez/Yosemite National Park/Menace55 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ChrispinPerez


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Yosemite National Park / Draft by student was not complete
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Yosemite National Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
LEAD

- I believe the lead should start with a brief description of the concept of Yosemite National Park then leading it into a historic background and how it connects to the United States.

- Make sure the lead only includes what is going to be discussed in this article and accurately describe the articles topic

CONTENT

- Maybe looking into more of the background of Yosemite and how it became a national park or should I say orgins

ORGANIZATION

- Be sure that everything is in order to help the reader better understand

IMAGES AND MEDIA

- There are several images and media coverage of Yosemite adding it will help the reader get a better picture of the topic of discussion

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS

- Was not completed