User:Christiana Dalton/Critical period hypothesis/Kkaitlyn0304 Peer Review

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Christiana Dalton
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Christiana! I like how you formatted your edits and showed what the original text was. After seeing the original text, I like how you elaborated on the topic and expanded on Krashen's theories. The content you included is relevant, neutral, and fact driven. It is also backed up by a trustworthy source as it was sourced from JSTOR and published by an international association, and I noticed that the original paragraph and section does not have a source cited for that information, so nice job adding one! This was definitely the place to edit this article. The paragraph also seems more complete with your addition of being contradictory, and ties in nicely with the rest of the section from the original article.

I think if you change your opening sentence to more of an introductory on Krashen and what his beliefs were before stating that they are contradictory that it would be less repetitive since you mention that they are contradictory again at the end of the paragraph. Even removing the first sentence may help go straight into the section and the facts since you discuss how it is contradictory at the end. I was also wondering why you chose to add the citation in the middle of the paragraph and not the end since I am assuming the rest of the information you included in the paragraph also came from that source (I'm not too confident in how Wikipedia works on where citations should be added).

I think the most important thing you can do to continue improving this article is to keep adding citations! I noticed there were a few other areas that are lacking citations, and you already improved this section by doing so, so keep it up! My favorite part about your edit was that it was clearly fact driven, just as Wikipedia intended. Now I want to go back to my edits to make sure they look like that as well!

-Kaitlyn Li