User:Chromium2451/Wolframite/Shrekinspector Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Chromium2451


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chromium2451/Wolframite?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Wolframite

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Brucey. The Wolframite article is currently very much a stub, and your sections you seek to add will be very beneficial. As a mineral, including properties and crystal structure is crucial, so well done. Good addition of its formation and common deposit type. I would add more to this such as deposit occurrences, and I would definitley expand on the formation if possible, perhaps talk about related minerals too, and wolframite's mineral group in general. Expand too on why it is related to the mentioned structures. You break down the crystal structure in a clear and concise way, and in general your additions are very straight forward, neutral, and easy to read. Good addition of more uses too.

My biggest suggested change would be take out that second paragraph in the lead and put it somewhere else. You could even expand on it and make a whole new section on history and location. I think this would declutter the lead nicely and make it concise. Consider too adding sections on global occurence, and perhaps any safety concerns if they exist. This would all balance out the content more.

Your sources all look good and reliable. Obviously you will have more added in the final draft.

I see the rubric mentions the talk page? So I guess add something there about the changes you plan to make etc.