User:CiGaLynch/Magnus Millang/Gab99514 Peer Review

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CiGaLynch


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 * Magnus Millang

Tone and Balance
Well done for providing neutral information in regards to Millang's professional career. You have successfully represented facts without pushing the reader towards a specific opinion.

Organization and Content
Your article is well-focused on Millang's career. I think it would be beneficial to add some sub-headings to further guide the reader, and to air out the text. The information presented is similar to what is in the current article, however, so if you want to focus on his career, or on his collaborations with his brother, for instance, perhaps that would be a great sub-heading within the career section. Also, great job on using WikiLinks for existing articles! Just make sure to check for grammatical errors, capitalization (i.e. Danish, YouTube, etc.), and syntax/wordiness - shortening sentences keeps the reader engaged and on track with what you wish to say. I'd also suggest reviewing and streamlining the original article for uniformity purposes with things such as the date layout for Millang's birth, the placement of commas, etc.

References and Sources
I am sure all the valuable information you have written is from traceable sources; just make sure to add references and citations for the information you have written!

Images/Media
None included in your draft, but that's quite alright ;) I'd suggest finding a poster or a photo of an ad depicting Millang's work.

Overall Impressions
Strong start! Keep going! I look forward to reading your finished article. I would focus on citation, formatting, and writing, but you've got neutrality and quality content down pat!