User:CiaelShiroi/Oni/Knight-Errant of the Mesa Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CiaelShiroi


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CiaelShiroi/Oni?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Oni

Evaluate the drafted changes
First thing that I notice, is that the "Lead" portion is down below the etymological origins of the word "Oni", so that's a simple thing to address. Lots of bold text which is unnecessary, but that's a really minor observation. Other than that your grasp of the information seems to be really solid, and your description professional. PS, I know you've been assigned to review my article and currently there's nothing there, but don't worry, I will be making additions and actually providing information. Good job on your article.