User:Cierracardenas/Food security/Meganyeh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cierracardenas


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cierracardenas/Food_security?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Clearly establishes that they are adding to the food sovereignty section and the history in which it emerges.

Content
The content is concise and provides a clear understanding of food sovereignty as it exists in social, political, and economic institutions. The author added content that was relevant to the topic of food security, which adding additional information that did not previously exist. The author does a good job of describing food sovereignty in a modern day setting and how it has improved social norms for food security in society. The content also enhances what food security is by considering how establishing independent cultivation of food improves food security in a way that is based off of self mobilization rather than a resource solution to poverty.

Tone and Balance
The tone of the article remains neutral while still providing insight to the bias that Western society has on solutions to food insecurity. It recognizes how the Global South has been viewed as inferior and struggles with food security because of the resource based solutions that the Global North has continuously pursued. The author does a good job of balancing this perspective with a neutral tone.

Sources and References
The sources could be improved to provide a greater plethora of scholarly resources detailing the history of food sovereignty. However, the author does a good job at providing adequate scholarly sources. However, citations still need to be added.

Organization
The author could improve on the organization of the piece. It feels as though the history from which food sovereignty emerges does not flow into the modern day sector smoothly. There could also be more of a breakdown of different subsections that would improve the organization of the piece.

Overall Impression
Overall, this article was concise and informative. It added to the article food security in a way that provided enriching information that did not previously exist in the article. There was clear information that was neutral and provided insight into food sovereignty.