User:Cierracardenas/Food sovereignty/Meganyeh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cierracardenas


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cierracardenas/Food_sovereignty?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead[edit]
There is no lead for this article detailing the author's contribution.

Content[edit]
The content is concise but does not provide a clear display of information. The article is on the difference between food sovereignty vs food security, but I do not see how this contributes to the article. The contribution does not feel as though it adds additional information to the article, but it is related to the content. It details what food sovereignty and security is, but does not describe the difference between the two and how they relate to each other in much depth.

Tone and Balance[edit]
The tone of the article remains somewhat neutral but there are certain parts that seem a bit bias. There could be an improvement in producing a neutral tone while still balancing how food sovereignty and security have played a role in the food justice movement.

Sources and References[edit]
The sources could be improved to provide a greater plethora of scholarly resources detailing the history of food sovereignty. However, the author does a good job at providing adequate scholarly sources. However, citations still need to be added.

Organization[edit]
The author could improve on the organization of the piece. It feels as though there is a lack of clarity between sections. There could also be improvements on organization of the different subsections.

Overall Impression[edit]
Overall, this article was concise but could be more informative. There needs to be more clarity throughout the piece and content that is relevant but not repetitive.