User:Cinobunny/Larix laricina/Digi227Bravo Peer Review

General info
Cinobunny
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Cinobunny/Larix laricina
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Larix laricina

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) The lead is pretty good, but the first sentences runs a little long. Actually the entire lead is a single sentence. Grammatically it's fine, but maybe a bit of a mouthful for someone first coming to the page.
 * 2) Your content is good. You have done well to declutter this article. However, you removed the "reaction to competition" section, which I thought was one of the more interesting sections from an ecological perspective. The "Damaging agents" section you left in. Consider combining and shortening these two sections into the ecology segment.
 * 3) I don't see any instances of bias so, you all good there.
 * 4) I see you removed several images that were not very good. I agree with this, but I do think you should add back the side column with a map showing where these trees are located.
 * 5) Organization of the article needs more work-- like reorganizing the sections I mentioned above, but also, the article ends quite abruptly. considering moving or adding a section to the end that is low-importance, yet intersting, and also easy to read, without too much jargon. Bring us in for a nice soft landing.
 * 6) There are few places in the article, that I find difficult read such as "2.3 cm (3⁄8–7⁄8 in) long". The fractions are very jarring to the eye. Consider cleaning this up a bit.
 * 7) You certainly have made significant improvements over the original article. With a little more work, this article will be tip-top. Good Job.