User:CitadelArchives009/Dr. Stone/Sjnickerson Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:CitadelArchives009 - Wikipedia


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:CitadelArchives009/Dr. Stone - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dr. Stone - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Anthony,

Just got through going over your article, I think it's turned out really good! I appreciate that you found a "GA-class" Wikipedia on a contemporaneous manga series to use as a model article, and maybe you do or don't feel that having a model article was useful... but it seems to me like it paid off!

I also liked that you expanded your sources as much as you did from your initial bibliography I saw. Your new sources are a great variety of pretty high-quality sources. I know I gave you a little bit of a hard time at first about source "quality" and I think you handled that deftly.

You also seem to have been very judicious in which sections of the article to edit slightly, and which ones to expand significantly. I think your edits make the article as a whole more balanced, without adding too much "clutter" or "fluff" anywhere. Nice job with that!

There is one sentence that you added... "He decided that his best approach with creating Senku was to create a character that was ambitious and chose to actively push themselves through hard work in order to fulfill their goals." I'm not so sure this is found in the source you cited for that sentence: Riichiro Inagaki Reveals Inspiration for 'Dr. STONE' And More in New Interview – OTAQUEST. I see on that article where it says: "many shonen protagonists were kind of flashy, with crazy super powers or abilities, and thought that it might be kind of cool to have a more “normal” protagonist for once" so I totally see where you're coming from, but I would try to align what your adding to the Wikipedia article with the verbiage of your source a little more closely. I'm sure you're right about your sentence, but whatever source you use has to back it up explicitly.

That's just a minor point, though! I might make some minor word choice changes (for example, "Boichi grew captivated on how" to "Boichi grew captivated imagining how"), but that's up to your discretion. I also might add a sentence relating to the manga's popularity to the lead section. If you look at the One-Punch Man lead section, you see at the end: "As of June 2012, the original webcomic surpassed 7.9 million hits. As of April 2020, the manga remake had sold over 30 million copies worldwide, making it one of the best-selling manga series." Maybe you could find similar stats for Dr. Stone?

Overall, great work! Maybe just do some refining and/or add some more content as you have time. You seem to have navigated the ins and outs of Wikipedia's, shall we say, intricacies very well, haha. Let me know if you have any questions or concerns that I didn't address. Sorry about the delay too, I seem to have messed up my watchlist notifications somehow.

Sjnickerson (talk) 16:37, 12 April 2022 (UTC)