User:Citrusaries/Western Illinois University Marching Leathernecks/Keagan Beckner Peer Review

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Lead: The lead I believe is the first little paragraph which does a good job of summarizing what the color guard is.

Content: I like that each section is split up and there is good information for each section. I feel like there is nothing more to add to the instrumentation section info wise but you could add a picture of a flag or the wooden rifles used. Choreography is well written but one thing that could be an addition is how long it usually takes to choreograph a song, which opens up some sources you could use!!! Finally, the last section about traditions is a good addition to the sections you are adding. The traditions could give reason as to why some things happen in color guard, such as the chant. I believe it helps the article by making it a more interesting read.

Tone: All I have to say for tone is the information is given out very peacefully and you can tell that this is to inform and not do anything other than that.

Overall, I think this is a good addition to the Western Illinois University Marching Leathernecks page. It gives information about the color guard which is apart of the band. Most people overlook the color guard so adding a section about color guard at Western could get people interested and maybe possibly inspire. the only thing I would like to see if I was reading would be pictures.