User:Cjaneellen/Sport psychology/AngelOffley Peer Review

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CJaneellen
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Lead

The lead gives a quick overview of the origins and development of sports psychology, mentioning key figures and institutions like Dr. Carl Diem. I recommend highlighting the evolution of the field, including the early experiments in Russia and the impact of the Cold War on sports psychology.

Content and Sources/References

The content added is definitely relevant and provides a solid historical overview of sports psychology! I noticed you’ve included important milestones and figures, which is great! I recommend ensuring that all information is backed by reliable sources. Mentioning key publications like Schulte's "Body and Mind in Sport" adds depth. Of course, make sure that all sources are up-to-date and accurately reflect the historical development. I also believe that adding more about the modern applications and current trends in sports psychology could help enhance the article!

Tone and Balance

The tone of the draft is neutral. You've done a good job of presenting facts without bias! Just ensure that you maintain this neutrality throughout, especially when discussing the impact of the Cold War and the performances of both Soviet and American athletes.

Organization

The draft is well-organized, providing a clear historical progression of sports psychology. However, I think it could be more concise. Some sentences are a bit long and could be broken up for better readability. For example, "The Americans felt that their sport performances were inadequate and very disappointing compared to the ones of the Soviets, so this led them to invest more in the methods that could ameliorate their athletes performance, and made them have a greater interest on the subject," could be broken up a bit. I believe clear headings for different time periods or key developments could also help improve readability!

Images and Media

I think adding images or diagrams to illustrate key points, such as early sports psychology labs or influential figures like Dr. Carl Diem would be nice! Pictures or diagrams can make the article more engaging and help break up the text, making it easier to read.