User:Cjaneellen/Sport psychology/Makylam18 Peer Review

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Janeellen- @Cjaneellen
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Cjaneellen/Sport psychology :Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Sport psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
After looking through your sandbox draft, I noticed that you had some references in your bibliography. They were listed out correctly and explained correctly. You could add some more peer reviewed references as you continue to edit and can add more articles that back up any information that you add into the article. I read through your draft and saw that there is only one sentence added to the chunk that you moved into your sandbox. You could continue to edit on this draft and expand. I believe that what you did bring from the article was necessary because you want to give insight to your topic from things in the past. I'm not sure if you want to start with this particular paragraph or if you just chose this chunk to start with, but I would lead with an introduction to what sports psychology is so that the reader knows what the article is about firsthand. You should fact check some of the information that is in the original article as your doing your research and adding on to the article. I would also consolidate some of the topic and reduce the information to a couple of cohesive paragraphs.