User:Cjones1015/Gender pay gap in sports/Shadycedars Peer Review

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Cjones1015, Burve003


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 * User:Cjones1015/Gender pay gap in sports


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 * Gender pay gap in sports

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you guys have a solid draft. Great job on citations, it seems like you're properly backing up every fact on the page. You've done a nice job of adding more to the section on economic return, I think you've added valuable info there. Additionally, I think you've brought up an important point when you discuss the pay disparity for other people in the field, not just the athletes (in you section titled "Sports Industry"). You highlight the income inequality of coaches, managers, etc., and that is often an underrepresented aspect of the pay gap in sports. I also like how you've broken down by sport the disparities that exist, though I would recommend making it as complete as possible (i.e., find info on/include all major sports leagues, even ones that are less common to us here).

My main recommendation to you would be to go over and proofread it. There are areas that sound a bit choppy, or where the sentences don't flow together as well as they could, and other minor grammatical issues. Also, make sure you spell out acronyms first before continuing to use them (in your first paragraph, all of the league abbreviations are without an explanation, not everyone reading the article may know what all of them mean).