User:Claireckm/Diana and Actaeon (Titian)/Venrenerd Peer Review

General info
Claireckm
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Claireckm/Diana and Actaeon (Titian)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Diana and Actaeon (Titian)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

 * The Lead is concise and describes the content of the Wikipedia article. In comparison to the original article's Lead section, this revised version moves the description of the painting to the later sections.

Content

 * I appreciate the addition of the sections on subject matter and composition. The current version of the article included two large sections on the provenance of Diana and Actaeon, and while this information may be important to the history of the painting, it excluded the actual substance of the painting. Adding in sections of "Historical Context" and "Provenance" was a great way to reuse the existing information within the original article. However, I feel that there is an overuse of quotes in the composition section. I understand that those sources are useful and have provided a lot of good content, but there needs to be a synthesis of the all the quotes into one succinct section.

Tone and Balance

 * Work on having a more neutral tone (this will most likely come from a synthesis of the quotes)

Sources and References

 * I appreciate the diversity in source types - you have a good range of articles and books from different time periods. All your links work as well.