User:Claireorcutt/Fritz Roethlisberger/Cwdascher15 Peer Review

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Claireorcutt
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Claireorcutt/Fritz Roethlisberger
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Fritz Roethlisberger

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello Claire, looking really good so far. looks like you added a lot of information on his studies and work. A bibliography allows me to grasp background knowledge of the topic at hand. The things I would add is a body paragraph about his career and how his work impacted the business world. I will also see there are no citations for your sources, I would consider citing the sources you selected in there. This will just add a little more detail on his career that people wouldn't find. I see that the current article Fritz is very limited on information and your improvements would really increase the worth of the article. Honestly looks really good, keep it up!!