User:Claireorcutt/Fritz Roethlisberger/Marcus2023 Peer Review

General info
Claireorcutt
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Claireorcutt/Fritz Roethlisberger
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Fritz Roethlisberger

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * No it has not.


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * The current introductory sentence is very brief and does not mention any notable accomplishments of Roethlisberger. It does describe who he was though.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * No, the lead only consists of one sentence. I would recommend adding some information about his work with the Hawthorne Studies into the Lead. Ex: "Roethlisberger played a key role in the success of the Hawthorne Studies, (input a brief description of the study here and the names with links to the articles of fellow contributors)."
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * No, all of the information in the Lead is in the article.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * The Lead is very concise. There is not much detail provided so I would recommend adding more information about his notable accomplishments.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * The content added is very relevant to the topic. Prior to the edits, the article was missing a significant amount of detail. The article now provides detailed information about his work and his personal life.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * The content added does appear to be up-to-date.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * Not that I noticed. The content added does a great job of explaining the Hawthorne Studies and his other work.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * It does not deal with an equity gap or topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes the content is neutral.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No, I did not notice any bias.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No, the new content is neutral.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No, the content added does not attempt to influence the reader. The new content is very neutral and completely based on facts from the Hawthorne Study.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes the article is well-written. There is not much "fluff" within the article and it is all based on facts. It is also easy to read due to the break-up of paragraphs and the headings.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Not that I noticed.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * Yes it is. It is broken into sections that make the article easy to read and understand. I would suggest possibly adding a header for "Career" to break up information under the "Biography" section. If this suggestion is taken, I would also recommend renaming "Biography" to be "Early Life" instead. I would also keep "The Hawthorne Studies", "After the Hawthorne Studies", and "The Contributions of Roethlisberger's Work" as subheaders below the "Career" header.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Yes, there is now an image of Fritz Roethlisberger. This addition provides the reader with the ability to understand and see who he was.
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * There is currently not a caption on the image.
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * The image does not currently adhere to the copyright regulations. The image is missing a description, origin (source), author, permission, date, location, and rationale for use. Adding this information is key to keeping the image available!
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?
 * Yes the image is located at the top of the article with the Lead.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * The content added has greatly improved the quality of the article. There is now detailed information about the Hawthorne Studies which was originally not available. There are also content gaps filled from his early life.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The content added provides more insight in the early life of Roethlisberger. It also provides more in-depth information about his contributions with the Hawthorne Studies. Overall the content creates a better picture of the life and accomplishments of Roethlisberger.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * Add more headings/subheadings to further break up the information. In the Publications section I would recommend making "Books" and "Articles" into subheadings rather than regular text.