User:Clairer.svg/Hair in African Sculpture/AdriN070 Peer Review

I think that the very last sentence in the introduction could be omitted or it could be combined with the sentence, “Hair has been depicted in a variety of sculptures”. It sounds repetitive because the sentence before the line “representations of hair…” is very similar to the one right after. Then it allows for a smooth transition into the Figure Sculptures paragraph. Other than that, I think the article is outlined nicely and it is clear on what topic is being talked about in each section. Looking forward to the final draft!

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