User:Clairer.svg/Hair in African Sculpture/Mkoch21Fox Peer Review

I think you guys did a really good job with what you have so far! Your tone is fairly clear, and sounds neutral to me. Each section is extremely small though--maybe add onto each section a bit more? I know you guys had to switch your topic slightly last minute, so no worries! We're all a work in progress haha

Nothing was officially cited yet so I couldn't check links or anything, but yeah, just add the references and I think this is a really good start!

It looks fairly well organized, albeit a bit disjointed. The first paragraph is so huge but then the other parts feel so small. Maybe breaking up that bit paragraph and distributing it into the other smaller paragraphs would be helpful!

Overall, I think the information you have is strong, and that images will definitely help it out even more for visualization! (I know we haven't gotten that far yet)

Great job!

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Clarier.svg, Ficklepickle311, PacificBelle19


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