User:Clancyelizabeth/Positive psychology/Sray13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Clancyelizabeth


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Clancyelizabeth/Positive_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Positive psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
The First Positive Psychology Summit took place in September of 1999, in Lincoln, Nebraska. The first positive psychology summit took place in 1999. The First International Conference on Positive Psychology took place in 2002. The first international positive psychology summit took place in Washington, D.C. in 2002. More attention was given by the general public in 2006 when, using the same framework, a course at Harvard University became particularly popular. In June 2009, the First World Congress on Positive Psychology took place at the University of Pennsylvania.

-After the first sentence in this paragraph I might suggest adding some information about the first summit to break create a break between the first summit and the first international summit. It makes sense but does cause the reader to have to make the distinction as they read. You could also do a rewrite instead of adding info, for example, In 2002, the first international positive psychology summit was held in Washington, D.C.

-I would also suggest adding a citation on positive institutions, there is one below connected to the last sentence that you could re-use

According to Seligman and Peterson, positive psychology addresses three issues: positive emotions, positive individual traits, and positive institutions. Positive emotions are concerned with being content with one's past, being happy in the present and having hope for the future. Positive individual traits focus on one's strengths and virtues. Finally, positive institutions are based on strengths to better a community of people.

I made suggestions in bold and am excited to see what else you have to add to this article!